tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post8081362880572925289..comments2023-07-22T15:44:42.859+01:00Comments on More about the song - rambling with Rachel Fox: The Poetry Bus and the cheeky halves...Rachel Foxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comBlogger26125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-72276761029335069182010-06-02T19:08:25.926+01:002010-06-02T19:08:25.926+01:00Well, I have a 10 year old in the house, Jeanne! S...Well, I have a 10 year old in the house, Jeanne! Something to study...<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-64533261809252060782010-06-02T19:06:25.490+01:002010-06-02T19:06:25.490+01:00I love the independent, inquisitive spirit of this...I love the independent, inquisitive spirit of this 10-year-old, and you capture it well, here, Rachel.Dr. Jeanne Irishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11277286531162894465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-21415967284786940002010-06-02T10:29:16.458+01:002010-06-02T10:29:16.458+01:00I thought I'd responded to some of these alrea...I thought I'd responded to some of these already...seems not! Thanks everyone, for reading this and for your comments.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-42253797244360221362010-06-01T18:42:51.609+01:002010-06-01T18:42:51.609+01:00Beautiful stuff Rachel - it conjures up Melodie ve...Beautiful stuff Rachel - it conjures up Melodie very well. Lovely that you should choose a sentence from the Rose Tremain - good that you are reading it. Love to you. Hope you will jump on the bus next Monday when I am driving - I have just posted this week's challenge.The Weaver of Grasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13947971556343746883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-75540625276106674122010-06-01T07:56:28.333+01:002010-06-01T07:56:28.333+01:00I'm with the 'last line' crowd, althou...I'm with the 'last line' crowd, although the whole thing is a compact little gem.Argenthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10532506690426639326noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-20990345297537492602010-05-31T21:45:05.736+01:002010-05-31T21:45:05.736+01:00Really enjoyed this, love that last line.Really enjoyed this, love that last line.Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-80112931268077457402010-05-31T20:27:46.248+01:002010-05-31T20:27:46.248+01:00Really liked this one Rachel. The "slip of so...Really liked this one Rachel. The "slip of solitude" and the jam jar were the best bits for me.<br /><br />KatKat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-72695007406211824052010-05-31T16:19:43.978+01:002010-05-31T16:19:43.978+01:00I sometimes find that the poems I write when I am ...I sometimes find that the poems I write when I am at my weakest and my intellect is drained are the poems that touch my readers most. You subject is a child, and there's a child-like simplicity here.Enchanted Oakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14815997287116818456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-32042665132632451532010-05-31T13:00:58.120+01:002010-05-31T13:00:58.120+01:00Out walking of late with the cats of water, they b...Out walking of late with the cats of water, they brought me to a bus. The bus pulled up here and I stopped a while to read. I liked it a lot, Melodie, the feel of music, the sunshine swimming and all the rest. <br /><br />I was compelled to begin at your beginning. See my blog for what followed: www.ormymusic.com<br /><br />Thanks for the words.<br /><br />Ormy.Ormyhttp://www.ormymusic.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-74780044512437755772010-05-31T11:33:21.390+01:002010-05-31T11:33:21.390+01:00Rachel, this is immense. Not a word wasted, super...Rachel, this is immense. Not a word wasted, superfluous or out of place. Stunning writing.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-5863390218045716102010-05-31T11:21:32.364+01:002010-05-31T11:21:32.364+01:00Thanks for all these comments - very encouraging, ...Thanks for all these comments - very encouraging, they are.<br /><br />I find myself using more and more italics, Niamh. They are my new best friends, I think.<br /><br />Interesting that you like the solitude bit Gwei Mui...that was my only 'cheat' (i.e. I added it in last...it wasn't one of my sentence endings). I just felt the poem was missing something...and that was it. I haven't really a clue why 'slip'...slipped in. I like it though.<br /><br />And Watercats...yes, a change from whisky from the jar, eh?<br /><br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-68005721972710143372010-05-31T11:16:08.898+01:002010-05-31T11:16:08.898+01:00seriously enjoyed this.. and felt quite moved by y...seriously enjoyed this.. and felt quite moved by your introduction... sorry for your loss.<br />I love that end line.. "she'd drink jam from a jam jar" is completely intrigueing and could go so many places.. love it!Batteson.Indhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846214578565824955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-26314364248740194102010-05-31T08:07:33.631+01:002010-05-31T08:07:33.631+01:00Yes, agree, the last line is a chiller, expertly c...Yes, agree, the last line is a chiller, expertly constructed and deeply personal (not always a combination that is successful)Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-32052430853169695152010-05-31T06:52:07.094+01:002010-05-31T06:52:07.094+01:00Hi Rachel, this left me with goose bumps.
a slip o...Hi Rachel, this left me with goose bumps.<br />a slip of solitude<br />I find this peom really soleful, but my favourite lines sum it all up<br />"a slip of solitude"<br />"left to herself, she's drink jam from the jar"@ctors Businesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04118148558033452749noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-61724939341346078602010-05-30T21:55:32.443+01:002010-05-30T21:55:32.443+01:00I think the poem has a really interesting structur...I think the poem has a really interesting structure to it, the voice is different in the italics, and the last line is pretty much a killer! I'd drink jam from the jar if it was liquidy enough! And the name works really well with it too.<br />sorry you're not liking poetry as much at the moment... fair play for still getting on the bus, and hope the festival was good!!<br />xNiamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-58350040046726240152010-05-30T16:45:18.072+01:002010-05-30T16:45:18.072+01:00A triumph arising from such fiddly origins, Rachel...A triumph arising from such fiddly origins, Rachel!Dickhttp://patteran.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-81880501163490489602010-05-30T15:47:13.151+01:002010-05-30T15:47:13.151+01:00Yes it's a lovely poem, a different air about ...Yes it's a lovely poem, a different air about it than some of your others.<br />I remember being terribly upset when a relative of mine stopped watching the soaps. What's the point, she said, I'll never know what happens.Emerging Writerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06539530495238043923noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-29847504034819250652010-05-29T22:45:56.250+01:002010-05-29T22:45:56.250+01:00I, too, think it's a really good one. I like t...I, too, think it's a really good one. I like the loose ends, the suggested possibilities - and that globe.Billhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10038327546170560939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-22194246643501489962010-05-29T21:41:53.189+01:002010-05-29T21:41:53.189+01:00I can't really see why a couple of you like th...I can't really see why a couple of you like this so much more than others of mine...but then it is hard to judge our own work. I hope it's not just that you feel sorry for me with the grief an' all...<br /><br />I suspect if I read this poem by someone else I wouldn't like it at all! Best not psychoanalyse that too much I think...<br /><br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-64073319887934692392010-05-29T20:34:47.010+01:002010-05-29T20:34:47.010+01:00Pain =poetry. That's the bottom line.
Like Rac...Pain =poetry. That's the bottom line.<br />Like Rachel F says, one of your best.<br />The globe is small in all of our hands.Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-62727685930524007912010-05-29T18:26:40.721+01:002010-05-29T18:26:40.721+01:00Yes, M, it would be odd if I wasn't grieving a...Yes, M, it would be odd if I wasn't grieving at all! We were very close, me and Mum...my Dad died years ago and I was very much the baby at the end of the line. Plus we lived in the same house for last six years!<br /><br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-50909547054444637372010-05-29T13:46:01.905+01:002010-05-29T13:46:01.905+01:00I like the way you have captured something subtle ...I like the way you have captured something subtle about the children's random concerns and how the things that go through their heads have no connections to an outside viewer. I liked the idea of 'the sound of Russian', I love listening to foreign languages.<br />I am so sorry that you are feeling so despondent, I think it is important to let yourself grieve and not expect it to pass quickly, just allow yourself to be sad and don't feel obliged to cheer up for anyone else.<br />with much love<br />martinemartinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14260048849955077472noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-66855481674318151112010-05-29T11:26:59.653+01:002010-05-29T11:26:59.653+01:00I utterly love the last sentence.
Enjoy your fest...I utterly love the last sentence.<br /><br />Enjoy your festivalling, XErylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06008344023000459577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-5824599777669756092010-05-29T11:15:04.119+01:002010-05-29T11:15:04.119+01:00Hugs xHugs xRachel Fentonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10046917627054462214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-62943568367179318902010-05-29T10:35:33.657+01:002010-05-29T10:35:33.657+01:00Oh Rachel - you're just a love and a half. It&...Oh Rachel - you're just a love and a half. It's funny this poem...it has Mum in it and the girl in it...and me a bit too of course...and none of us.<br /><br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.com