tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post7098761835213498034..comments2023-07-22T15:44:42.859+01:00Comments on More about the song - rambling with Rachel Fox: November skiesRachel Foxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comBlogger34125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-36126228532362495642008-11-17T17:29:00.000+00:002008-11-17T17:29:00.000+00:00Thanks SL...and welcome to you too!xThanks SL...and welcome to you too!<BR/>xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-9060686056521364042008-11-17T17:01:00.000+00:002008-11-17T17:01:00.000+00:00The fourth stanza is a real clincher. "Buzzing blu...The fourth stanza is a real clincher. "Buzzing blue" sounds so very apt. ;) Cheers.S.L. Corsuahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10299376651709536034noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-17810362173029558162008-11-17T03:15:00.000+00:002008-11-17T03:15:00.000+00:00Thanks, Rachel, for the reply and the welcome. :)W...Thanks, Rachel, for the reply and the welcome. :)<BR/><BR/>Were it my poem to edit, I'd play with just dropping "it" rather than changing "try".<BR/><BR/>But if the rhyme feels right to you, then I can't argue with it staying. :)<BR/><BR/>(verification word: constess)anniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08324828987699178581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-28306528408507043582008-11-16T16:23:00.000+00:002008-11-16T16:23:00.000+00:00You're forgiven..it's only a question after all! I...You're forgiven..it's only a question after all! I can't explain why those last lines are like that...partly because I am a pretty instinctive writer...I write what comes out pretty much. But also you should know that I love rhymes and write lots of them...whenever and wherever they seem right (and it seemed right here). As for the content of the question...it's a bit of a cheek asking people to 'keep quiet' when I have just done the opposite (and churned more words out into an already very noisy world)...but I am a bit cheeky, I suppose...a bit contrary...a bit interested in confusion. I only said 'try it' after all...not 'do it'...<BR/><BR/>And welcome. By the way.Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-69239584300782992722008-11-16T16:17:00.000+00:002008-11-16T16:17:00.000+00:00Rachel, I'm new to these shores, followed here thr...Rachel, I'm new to these shores, followed here through Claire and Jim.<BR/><BR/>I'm a fan of your style, but rambling prose and lyrical verse. While I mostly dig this poem, the rhyme at the end (quiet/try it) distracts me and takes away from my experience. Why do you have it that way?<BR/><BR/>It feels like bad form to introduce myself and follow with a nitpick in the next breath. I hope you can forgive me.anniehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08324828987699178581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-72051344236002692008-11-16T15:20:00.000+00:002008-11-16T15:20:00.000+00:00Missed out Fiendish! Especially glad that you like...Missed out Fiendish! Especially glad that you like it - not that I have favourites or anything...<BR/><BR/>I have a poem about literary sets too (under 'writing' on website called 'On not having a literary circle').<BR/>xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-1772540484782621052008-11-16T15:17:00.000+00:002008-11-16T15:17:00.000+00:00I really appreciate all the comments on this one!D...I really appreciate all the comments on this one!<BR/><BR/>Dominic - I know what you mean...I often need uplifting myself...in so many ways!<BR/><BR/>Paul - I have my gonzo moments too! Glad you liked the blue in here.<BR/><BR/>Jim - I need that stanza...it sets up the silence idea which is kind of central to the poem. Plus it takes the poem to different places and feelings which I like.<BR/><BR/>S Walker - I know what you mean about 'colour of magic'...it is not something I would normally write (and that is of course one reason I quite like it in a sick sort of a way). I kept it partly because it links in with the 'spell' that comes in later...plus it means the poem gets better as it goes along (which I like). Better than the oppposite...<BR/><BR/>And Dave - thanks for rereading. I was in some doubts about this poem but most of the reactions here have helped me have a little more faith in it (warts and all).<BR/><BR/>xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-17258890562320845272008-11-16T11:49:00.000+00:002008-11-16T11:49:00.000+00:00Just read through your poem again, Rachel. it got ...Just read through your poem again, Rachel. it got to me - and involved me - much earlier this time. I guess I saw more in it with rereading, and I guess that's the mark of a really fine poem. Congrats. Incidentally, we are very close in our starting dates. My first post was just before Christmas '06, merely a statement of intent. I didn't expect to last this long. I was merely testing the water.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-24412576542946703832008-11-14T19:03:00.000+00:002008-11-14T19:03:00.000+00:00"Of noiseless time" is absolutely killer. I connec..."Of noiseless time" is absolutely killer. I connect with the feeling in this piece so much that it's almost startling.<BR/><BR/>When it comes to the Bloomsbury set, I must confess it's the kind of dream life I always imagine myself leading - but now that you mention it, you're quite right; we're not a bad lot all things considered :)Fiendishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06427088675092430747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-11676172149599451572008-11-14T18:58:00.000+00:002008-11-14T18:58:00.000+00:00Agree with last comment - that stanza holds up the...Agree with last comment - that stanza holds up the flow of the previous. 'Buzzing blue' much better than, say, 'colour of magic'. 'Buzzing blue' stanza absolutely fab.<BR/><BR/>Re 'messiness' - OK y'all, but, even with 'messy' Ginsberg, every word counted!The Solitary Walkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11284354541952038339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-35943013297742202082008-11-14T14:36:00.000+00:002008-11-14T14:36:00.000+00:00It is quite good. Try ditching the seven-line stan...It <I>is</I> quite good. Try ditching the seven-line stanza and see what you think.Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-74741102715089867962008-11-14T10:45:00.000+00:002008-11-14T10:45:00.000+00:00Woah - that took me back to some creative writing ...Woah - that took me back to some creative writing that I did back at uni.. it was (almost) gonzo style.. it was about a troubled young man who took to opiates... it was a year before trainspotting came out. <BR/><BR/>To cut a short story short - the ending was something about being enveloped in an embrace of blue... the lecturer loved it, and wanted me to go for the gonzo stlye in a big way. I didn't like the implications of what that might do to me!<BR/><BR/>Anyway - not as lovely as your poem by a long shot - but it made me have a wooooah moment.nommohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16668866558869888721noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-63597587638957014472008-11-14T08:30:00.000+00:002008-11-14T08:30:00.000+00:00I like the poem - it reminded me that there are as...I like the poem - it reminded me that there are aspects of the climate this (otherwise depressing, for me) time of year which are uplifting.Dominic Rivronhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02618013365521035400noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-78659419586344223682008-11-14T08:11:00.000+00:002008-11-14T08:11:00.000+00:00Now see - charming and informative!xNow see - charming and informative!<BR/><BR/>xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-76050971380985040612008-11-13T22:51:00.000+00:002008-11-13T22:51:00.000+00:00Thanks for the kind mention - your blog is a treas...Thanks for the kind mention - your blog is a treasure that just grows and grows.<BR/><BR/>William Boyd wrote the novel 'The Blue Afternoon' which is a good read - near the end he described a type of colour activity that occurs in the skies in the late-afternoon. He does it very well and this evoked it for me too.Ken Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07775956557261111127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-52339723465033073662008-11-13T19:10:00.000+00:002008-11-13T19:10:00.000+00:00Thanks SB and can I ask...is your blog name anythi...Thanks SB and can I ask...is your blog name anything to do with muppets?Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-21040853690608410182008-11-13T18:53:00.000+00:002008-11-13T18:53:00.000+00:00I like the poem, Rachel. If it is a bit messy, wha...I like the poem, Rachel. If it is a bit messy, what does that matter? Life is messy.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-86196216458192167492008-11-13T14:41:00.000+00:002008-11-13T14:41:00.000+00:00Thanks, Dick...whilst all these comments are much ...Thanks, Dick...whilst all these comments are much appreciated they are confusing me too! Maybe I should read this one tomorrow night...I wasn't planning to but then, to be honest, I keep changing my mind about what I'm going to read! Too much time to think about it...maybe I should go and clean something instead...<BR/>xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-39621564510909531682008-11-13T14:35:00.000+00:002008-11-13T14:35:00.000+00:00Great lead-up and great poem, Rachel. Your stuff i...Great lead-up and great poem, Rachel. Your stuff is so vocal and thus immediate and engaging. I loved this.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-46373203740674864632008-11-13T13:02:00.000+00:002008-11-13T13:02:00.000+00:00Now that's an interesting comment, Dave! I don't c...Now that's an interesting comment, Dave! I don't consciously think about it but I suppose I do want to involve the reader...that is a big part of my motivation/intention/subject. So if it did then...hurray. You too are a top geezer...for noticing!<BR/>xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-53288842705351784142008-11-13T12:56:00.000+00:002008-11-13T12:56:00.000+00:00Lovely poem. The last three lines clinch it, invol...Lovely poem. The last three lines clinch it, involve the reader and lift it to a different level.Dave Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430484174826768488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-77188086050120695022008-11-13T09:14:00.000+00:002008-11-13T09:14:00.000+00:00Thanks CGP. It's good to know my writing instincts...Thanks CGP. It's good to know my writing instincts are not all wrong! This poem feels right to me as it is...of course that doesn't mean everybody will like it or find it interesting (that never happens with any artwork...ever!) but it's good to know that at least some of you feel the same way. Very good to feel that!<BR/><BR/>xxxRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-26830185505110979192008-11-13T08:02:00.000+00:002008-11-13T08:02:00.000+00:00lovely poem, I especially like the ending.lovely poem, I especially like the ending.Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-37189982114097054212008-11-13T07:55:00.000+00:002008-11-13T07:55:00.000+00:00Thanks Ken...maybe this poem is OK as it is after ...Thanks Ken...maybe this poem is OK as it is after all...<BR/><BR/>And Kat...there was a sky a bit like it yesterday too - what timing! I suppose Remembrance Day and all thoughts, articles and posts about it (and its silence of course) did have an influence on me posting this one right now too. Stopping and thinking, taking a pause, remembering. thinking hard about what exactly you are remembering...it's all in there...Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-34332322299160869372008-11-12T23:00:00.000+00:002008-11-12T23:00:00.000+00:00"the spell of that buzzing blue" One could get int..."the spell of that buzzing blue" <BR/><BR/>One could get into psychic vibrations here, but I won't. Although, some force was at work, that's for sure.<BR/><BR/>I like mess too. I don't like everything to be perfect and honed and overwrought. Sometimes they just have to be.<BR/><BR/>Kat<BR/><BR/>P.S. Suggesting my poem could be a song was a compliment of the highest order (especially coming from you).Kat Mortensenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16877694888419628533noreply@blogger.com