tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post7956390919160290237..comments2023-07-22T15:44:42.859+01:00Comments on More about the song - rambling with Rachel Fox: The river busRachel Foxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comBlogger27125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-4903115926747914382010-09-09T08:07:14.215+01:002010-09-09T08:07:14.215+01:00Thanks Karen.
xThanks Karen.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-41913416749980039832010-09-09T02:08:26.043+01:002010-09-09T02:08:26.043+01:00I agree with Titus! I can truly relate to this one...I agree with Titus! I can truly relate to this one and enjoy the lyricism of it, too.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-17172314766688450042010-09-08T08:20:03.560+01:002010-09-08T08:20:03.560+01:00I guess I'll wait and see if someone else want...I guess I'll wait and see if someone else wants to give this poem a tune...<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-46746275386573716272010-09-07T19:19:42.720+01:002010-09-07T19:19:42.720+01:00What a great pairing, Rachel. You really need a tu...What a great pairing, Rachel. You really need a tune for this solemn contemplative piece.<br /><br />And the Karine Polwart is gorgeous. Thumb piano: what a stroke of genius!Dickhttp://patteran.typepad.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-11426805017212894822010-09-07T17:34:48.487+01:002010-09-07T17:34:48.487+01:00Your favourite what Weaver? Your favourite of mine...Your favourite what Weaver? Your favourite of mine?<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-3792966648457940042010-09-07T16:47:16.685+01:002010-09-07T16:47:16.685+01:00Love that poem Rachel - think it is my favourite.Love that poem Rachel - think it is my favourite.The Weaver of Grasshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13947971556343746883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-11185538846269224112010-09-07T07:15:31.365+01:002010-09-07T07:15:31.365+01:00Strictly speaking I suppose it should be 'did&...Strictly speaking I suppose it should be 'did' not 'do' but I think it's OK for these reasons - because that's the saying 'that thing that you do' (title of a film in fact), because the tenses are played with in the poem quite a bit anyway (gerund for one person, present tense on the whole for someone else who is really dead already), because it rhymes, because...poetic licence. There are times when words are changed round (order-wise) for rhyme that I really don't like but this has a few other things going on other than just the cause of the rhyme.<br /><br />There rests for the case for the defence!<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-34481045243726061702010-09-06T21:56:06.879+01:002010-09-06T21:56:06.879+01:00On the surface, a simple and pleasant poem but dig...On the surface, a simple and pleasant poem but dig down and there's a lot of stuff in there. My kind of poem.Not sure about the 'people were always the things that you do' line - is the tense right?Peter Gouldinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13292063172122249202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-54846236705810927412010-09-05T23:05:32.275+01:002010-09-05T23:05:32.275+01:00You were right, guys. I read it at an event locall...You were right, guys. I read it at an event locally tonight and as I got to the end I knew that the last line was enough... and the place to stop.<br />Thanks.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-42555617098506315042010-09-05T21:43:53.729+01:002010-09-05T21:43:53.729+01:00"people were always the things that you do&qu..."people were always the things that you do"... such an excellent line!... and that ending.. just a killer!Batteson.Indhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10846214578565824955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-23496105306463116442010-09-05T21:16:33.017+01:002010-09-05T21:16:33.017+01:00I like this a lot, particularly the last two or th...I like this a lot, particularly the last two or three verses.<br />The last line is brilliant, so I'd weigh on the side of leaving the refrain out.Pure Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04265599089734430505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-23305938434593284162010-09-05T17:53:40.444+01:002010-09-05T17:53:40.444+01:00Great quote, CL. And haunting would make sense... ...Great quote, CL. And haunting would make sense... my Mum only died a few months back and she died in this house (where we still live). This week I've even been sleeping in her old bed! I've been through the ever-tearful stage and right now I think I'm just sorting it all out in my head... as much as you can anyway.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-16498836694625479892010-09-05T17:24:53.333+01:002010-09-05T17:24:53.333+01:00Dear Rachel,
Your poem seems in harmony with the ...Dear Rachel,<br /><br />Your poem seems in harmony with the very familiar Norman Maclean quote: <br /><br />"Eventually, all things merge into one, and a river runs through it."<br /><br />I find your poem haunting, perhaps because I am haunted, and I love it all the more for this. Thanks for sharing with us!Carolina Lintheadhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16335905555994442416noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-34303227164840139582010-09-05T12:27:56.971+01:002010-09-05T12:27:56.971+01:00I can't decide whether it should have a last &...I can't decide whether it should have a last 'all change' at the end, by the way. Any thoughts on this appreciated... I might read it to an audience tonight and see how it feels then.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-13168603621895057722010-09-05T12:26:58.931+01:002010-09-05T12:26:58.931+01:00Some of you say the nicest things. Thanks.
xSome of you say the nicest things. Thanks.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-87381381222773006862010-09-05T12:11:49.102+01:002010-09-05T12:11:49.102+01:00Very beautiful Rachel, and yes the all change refr...Very beautiful Rachel, and yes the all change refrain works very well throughout, I got a sense of acceleration, and a great deal of experience.<br />Your mouth whispers hurt and your eyes are down low - it's gorgeous and heart felt, lovely.Niamh Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06519443787482685320noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-5509107737350954072010-09-05T10:53:21.495+01:002010-09-05T10:53:21.495+01:00A wonderful poem, Rachel, filled with intriguing p...A wonderful poem, Rachel, filled with intriguing pictures.NanUhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11596765792663269178noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-21966652630350827512010-09-05T08:38:09.988+01:002010-09-05T08:38:09.988+01:00Thanks you three. And no problem with the 'cir...Thanks you three. And no problem with the 'circle of life' Bug. I have a whole section of poems on my website called that! Though I'd have to say that they are not my favourite Disney songs as such...they can't touch the Jungle Book, Aristocats etc.<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-40568038872883698102010-09-05T01:35:41.147+01:002010-09-05T01:35:41.147+01:00Is is bad that I now have the Circle of Life song ...Is is bad that I now have the Circle of Life song in my head? This was a compact biography - beautifully written!The Bughttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07509037206264761261noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-66341598073255384712010-09-04T23:49:46.967+01:002010-09-04T23:49:46.967+01:00The river of life, and no mistake...The river of life, and no mistake...Jinksyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686101468214361004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-60110668367247703652010-09-04T16:43:29.747+01:002010-09-04T16:43:29.747+01:00This is lovely Rachel ... 'all change' fit...This is lovely Rachel ... 'all change' fits perfectly.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-71477968347750081332010-09-04T13:27:37.395+01:002010-09-04T13:27:37.395+01:00Many votes for the minnows and the weight, then.
...Many votes for the minnows and the weight, then.<br /><br />Touched, Titus? It could just be lack of sleep...<br />xRachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-1005548903553173252010-09-04T13:26:23.337+01:002010-09-04T13:26:23.337+01:00Bah! TFE just beat me to that line...Bah! TFE just beat me to that line...Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-76908341845972600422010-09-04T13:25:43.976+01:002010-09-04T13:25:43.976+01:00This rolled over me and took me places - there is ...This rolled over me and took me places - there is something vague, in an all people, all times, way about it. Intense as well, which sounds like a contradiction.<br />And this line is brilliant;<br />"You watch and you tense and your love is a weight"<br />I may have to come back and read this again, it's touched me.Titushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16380213493011623153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-37371305571400704012010-09-04T13:19:54.885+01:002010-09-04T13:19:54.885+01:00I love the opening lines...'Standing in a rive...I love the opening lines...'Standing in a river, fishing for minnows<br />You watch and you tense and your love is a weight'...class!<br /><br />I like the repeated 'all change'too.<br />Nice one Foxo!Totalfeckineejithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05352708391465031655noreply@blogger.com