tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post6100148737967794647..comments2023-07-22T15:44:42.859+01:00Comments on More about the song - rambling with Rachel Fox: HouseboundRachel Foxhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-71234885215835483782008-05-24T12:46:00.000+01:002008-05-24T12:46:00.000+01:00What a fantastic link...not something I had though...What a fantastic link...not something I had thought of at all. I do like 'The Sound of Music'...I always love the way you know it is just so ridiculous (the nuns, the Nazis, the songs) but it gets you every time. I defy any adult not to cry as the father walks back into the room and sees/hears the children singing in the house (palace!) again. I loved it as a kid and I still do. Our daughter has the cd so it is on in the car sometimes even (better than some kids' music...).<BR/>I also have a 'Sound of Music' poem...kind of...called 'Second to nun' (under 'songs and singing' on website).<BR/>You don't seem mad to me, by the way. Not from here.Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-28463982214593121582008-05-24T10:03:00.000+01:002008-05-24T10:03:00.000+01:00The last (not rhyming) line works brilliantly.For ...The last (not rhyming) line works brilliantly.<BR/><BR/>For me it echoes Chrisopher Plummer singing 'Edelweiss' in 'Sound of Music'... "blossom of snow may you bloom and grow..."<BR/><BR/>But then, as we know, I am a bit mad!Ken Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07775956557261111127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-46043502761069990502008-05-21T11:44:00.000+01:002008-05-21T11:44:00.000+01:00I think the 'machine' comes from that whole idea o...I think the 'machine' comes from that whole idea of wishing we knew how it worked when we have that first baby (and you're left alone with it...agh!). People joke about wanting a manual but of course none of the books that try to be that ever really manage it. Babies seem like machines...crying machines, poo machines, worry machines...but they're not of course.<BR/>That's where I think it came from but there might be other stuff too. I don't really see it as a mixed metaphor (and in fact I don't really mind them anyway...not in poems...they can be more interesting than obedient well-matched details). I just see it as a word that seems to fit in its place in the poem. Sometimes the stand-out-as-out-of-place words are the ones that are doing the best job. For me...Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-85637925439755875712008-05-21T11:29:00.000+01:002008-05-21T11:29:00.000+01:00I once heard a baby described as a padded alimenta...I once heard a baby described as a padded alimentary canal and I guess that's true with a burp at one end and a fart at the other and possibly a gurgle somewhere in the middle. I like this little poem but I'm so grateful you dropped the rhyme. They're so hard to do well and could turn cute into cheesy so easily. My main observation is the use of 'machine' – it's a wonderful picture but all the other imagery in the piece is nature related. You don't think of feeding a machine, a furnace perhaps, a printer even. It's a mixed metaphor and, although I get it, I'm not sure it does the poem justice. But I still like it.Jim Murdochhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12786388638146471193noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-63905928700594443362008-05-20T19:33:00.000+01:002008-05-20T19:33:00.000+01:00I've never tried a haiku...just never fancied yet....I've never tried a haiku...just never fancied yet...maybe some time...<BR/><BR/>As for the 'spoon'...probably less painful and messy than the baby feeding I remember!<BR/><BR/>Glad you like the other fridge magnet poem...I even considered using its title ('Let me be your fridge magnet') for my book but decided against it this time. There is an old rave song called 'Let me be your fantasy' (very cheesey) - I do like to use bits of song title when I can. Sometimes I use them consciously and other times they sneak in. That one was a sneak-in I think.Rachel Foxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11803852725693518924noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1564859019305736550.post-10102474365369500682008-05-20T18:53:00.000+01:002008-05-20T18:53:00.000+01:00nice, kind of haiku-ish, I keep wanting to read 's...nice, kind of haiku-ish, I keep wanting to read 'spoon' in front of 'feed'. I had already read your fridge-magnet poem and really like it!Marion McCreadyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04657757253873577465noreply@blogger.com